Continue this story! (For 6A students)
2008-04-30 17:17 by miss_ngYou have learnt many adjectives describing people in the previous lesson. Try to use them in this writing exercise. Watch this video clip about a waiter serving three diners. What happened at the end? You may write about:
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2008-04-30 18:42
John, a dog in grey colour, loved food a lot. He tried hard to get into the very famous restaurant in Hong Kong. When it was eating happily in the kitchen, Stephen the waiter saw it and kicked it out. It then approached the three diners because it loved to drink white wine too. It went near the diners in black suits cautiously. The three diners looked strict but actually they were really nice. They treated John a big meal.
hke-006A26 reply on 2008-04-30 19:20:
I like happy ending
miss_ng reply on 2008-04-30 19:23:
It’s a good passage and you have used some of the adjectives you have learnt in the previous lesson. Keep up the good work.
2008-04-30 18:46
The waiter is very humble. He bowed to the three diners. The three diners are very proud. They do not even look at anyone else. The waiter had to be nice to serve his customers.
miss_ng reply on 2008-04-30 19:24:
What happened at the end then?
2008-04-30 18:49
The restaurant is very cozy. The white wine is tasty.
miss_ng reply on 2008-04-30 19:24:
This passage is too short. You need to write more. Also, you should use adjectives to describe people.
2008-04-30 18:53
At the end, the dog is really sad. It is because the cold-blooded waiter kicked him out of the kitchen. The three diners were angry to see an animal walking around the restaurant and they scolded the dog. The dog felt un-loved and left this god-forsaken place.
miss_ng reply on 2008-04-30 19:25:
You can describe more about the waiter.
2008-04-30 18:55
The waiter was shocked to see the dog. He was very angry because there should not be an animal in the kitchen. He frowned and felt furious. The three diners were kind people. They were compassionate and felt sad about the dog. Therefore, they decided to adopt the dog and then the dog lived happily ever after.
miss_ng reply on 2008-04-30 19:26:
You have used some really difficult adjectives! Did you look them up in dictionary?
2008-04-30 19:01
The waiter was a very sociable person. Therefore he treated his customers very well. He had a very conservative boss who did not allow dogs in kitchen. Therefore he kicked the dog out. He thought by doing this, he could appear as a reliable employee.
miss_ng reply on 2008-04-30 19:26:
What happened to the three diners then?
2008-04-30 19:05
The waiter was very humble but actually he is very envious of the three rich diners in his heart. He was very ambitious and he wanted to be the manager. Therefore, he tried to be very cautious when dealing with all the restaurant businesses. So, he could not allow the dog in the kitchen. However, the three diners actually loved dogs very much. When they saw the dog was kicked. They were really angry and they left the restaurant immediately. The owner of the restaurant then felt very angry with the waiter and so he fired him.
miss_ng reply on 2008-04-30 19:27:
You should pay more attention to punctuation. In the sentence “When they saw the dog was kicked. They were really angry and they left the restaurant immediately.”, you should use a comma instead of a full stop.
2008-04-30 19:10
The waiter wore a black suit. He was very nice because he smiled all the time. He walked very quick because he cared about the customers’ need. Then two tall men and one fat and short man arrived. The two tall men looked as if they were twins. The fat man’s nose was very big and round. They were rich people.
miss_ng reply on 2008-04-30 19:29:
Good use of adjectives to describe people. You should also write about what happened to the dog.
2008-04-30 19:14
The waiter’s face is oval. He has thick eyebrows. His eyes were narrow. He has broad smile. He has a moustache. He had long hair. His clothes were elegant. He has a thin waist.
miss_ng reply on 2008-04-30 19:30:
Please write more about the three diners and how the story ends.
2008-04-30 19:19
The waiter had black eyes. He was helpful. He helped three diners to get a seat. He immediately brought wine to their table. One of the diners were very short and fat. He seemed to be a difficult person. However, he was gentle in heart because he loved dogs very much. He noticed a dog was wandering in the restaurant and so he took it home with care. He was really kind.
miss_ng reply on 2008-04-30 19:31:
Nice.